During summer
Plot : Jerry and his mum went for a holiday at the beach.Jerry Asked his mother so he can have a look at the rocks whichh where down the beach which was a wild-looking place and there was no one.Jerry's mother through he's old enough to be by himself without her. Jerr's mother was a widow adn was determined to be neither possesive nor lacking in devotion. He climbed up at a high among red-brown rocks, which was a scoop of moving bluish green fringed with white.He ran sliding and scraping down the last yards. He asw an edge of white surf and shallow, shinny movement water.Jerry met new friends and began diving again and again from a high pointed rocks.After a long time, the boy came up on the other side of his lungs in a spluttering gasp and a shout of triumph. Jerry saw a black wall of rock looming at him, he touched it and boobbed up at once at the diving rock and sat down, feeling the hot roughness of the sun on his thighs.Jerry wanted a pair of googles for swimming.Jerry gained the surface, clambered about the stones tha littered the barrier rock.Jerry got his head in,the hole and foundhis shoulder jammed.He could see nothing ahead.He pushed out backward and caught a glimpse as he retreated, of a harmless tentacle of seaweed drifting in the mouth of tunnel.Jerry exercised his lungs as if everything, the whole of life, all that he would become depended upon it.His nose bled at night, and his mother insisted on his coming with the next day.
Description of main character
Jerry
- He was 11 years old.
- He was decent to the boys and wanted to make friends with them.
- He's a good swimmer.
- He was a foreigner boy.
- He's jealous of the older boys.
- He was childish.
- He had courage and pride.
- Communicated with other people.
- Was not sure of his caoabilities.
- Was determined to achieved his goals.
Its a job welldone Ndapewa,i have decided to rate you at a grid of 7,because you have 4 spelling errors and at the main character's characteristics you you were not told to do note taking.
ReplyDeletei love your work,you did the setting, plot and character, but the promblem comes in when you listed the main character you were soppused to have 5-10 sentences in a paragraph form.other wise i would give you a 8.well done!
ReplyDeletethank sweety's..........and ou, i didnt know its suppose to be in paragraph form since everyone in my tutorial class did it as i did.
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